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hana_cho ([personal profile] hana_cho) wrote2008-11-08 09:14 pm

Opferungsfic Chapter 1

Title: Opferungsfic
Author: [livejournal.com profile] hana_cho
Pairings: YunJae, YooSu ...
Chapters: 1/...
Rating: PG-13 later NC-17
Warnings: AU, mpreg
Genre: Drama, Romance

A/N: The title is German and means sacrifice plus the word fic of fanfic
Every time I talk about that story I call it Opferungsfic and because I can't find a name I didn't change it. ^^

Summary: Sacrificing is the keyword. Every three month is a changing of the turn in the village, which must give a offering to their lord. This time it is the village of the Kim brothers turn. To help his beloved younger brother Jaejoong sacrifices himself. But he never expected what would happen.

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Thanks for beta reading [livejournal.com profile] junsu_luvr


Chapter 1

A boy ran along the main street of the village calling out “It's our turn again. Gather together.”

A young boy of eleven heard the message that the boy screamed. He looked up to his eldest brother to ask what is going on, but the fearful expression on his hyung's face stopped him.

“Let's hurry and get home, Min.” said the elder one. And both went quickly to their house.

“We’re back.” Jaejoong called out and put the groceries on the table. “Su~ah, where is Umma?” he asked.

“At the meeting.” answered the soft voice of the called one. “She should be hungry, when she comes back.” was added to the answer.

“Changmin could you go and get some water, so that we can prepare dinner.” Jaejoong told the youngest. The boy went out to get the water as the other two put the groceries away and started to prepare dinner.


The house was filled with the smell of the dinner as their mother came back from the villagers’ meeting. They all sat at the table and had started to eat as Jaejoong asked their mother. “Umma, who have you chosen to be sent this time?”

“This time it will be our Hyesu who will have the chance.” said their proud mother.

“But Umma, Hyesu is my hyung!” reminded Changmin.

“Don't call her that, she is your nuna.” demanded the mother. “Jaejoong, accompany her to the eldest’s home after dinner.”

“Yes, mother.”


After dinner, Jaejoong and Hyesu got ready to leave for the eldest’s house. They walked along the street in silence. The younger one was deep in his thoughts and kept his head down. Jaejoong looked at his brother. He had light, shoulder-length brown hair, almond-shaped eyes which shined so beautifully when he was happy, a little nose, and full lips. At the moment he wore a hanbok in a light green. He looked really beautiful. The smaller one looked up at Jaejoong.

“Oppa, why? Why am I the one who is chosen?” he asked shyly.

“Oppa? Of course. He only calls me hyung when we are alone.” thought Jaejoong and answered “I don't know, Su~ah.”

They arrived at the eldest’s house and knocked on the door. After a short time the eldest opened the door and let Jaejoong and Hyesu into the house. Both bowed and followed him inside. He offered a chair to Hyesu before he sat down himself. Jaejoong stood behind her.

“Hyesu, do you know why you’re here?” began the eldest.

“Yes, sir. I was chosen to be the offering.” she answered softly and with sadness in her voice.

“Yeah, you are here so we can speak about the ceremony.” the eldest continued, but was interrupted by Jaejoong.

“Eldest, why must it be Hyesu? Isn't there anyone else who can do it?”

“My dear boy, you know the terms and conditions of the lord, and Hyesu is the only one who meets them.”

Jaejoong laid a comforting hand on her shoulder. The light brown haired girl (or boy. Whichever u choose) was looking down on her folded hands.

“Hyesu, my dear Hyesu.” the eldest spoke to her and made her to look up and into the man’s old, brown eyes. “You turn seventeen tomorrow and we shouldn't wait too long to send you. We don't want to anger the lord, so it would be the best if we sent you to him tomorrow.”

They talked more about the details as the wife of the eldest came into the room. Hyesu stood up to bow to her. Within seconds she was in the embrace of the teary woman.

“My precious Hyesu” she cried. “You shouldn't be so sad, maybe you are the one that the lord will choose to marry. You should be happy.”

The words let fly the tears that Hyesu had been holding back for so long.

“Maybe I'm the one.” she said with a hoarse voice. “But I'm not the person they all think I am.” she thought.

All the fear of what would happen when the lord found out that she wasn't a girl made her break down in the arms of the eldest’s wife. Her tears wouldn’t stop and her body began to shake. Jaejoong took Hyesu in his arms and tried to console her.

“I will help you. I won't let you suffer.” he whispered in her ear so that nobody except Hyesu could hear it.

“It's late, Eldest. Our mother is waiting. We should go back.” said Jaejoong to the couple.

“You are right, my boy. Give her my greetings. And Hyesu, don't worry about it too much.”

They both bowed to them again. Jaejoong wrapped an arm around Hyesu's shoulder and they went home.

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And what do you think about it?
Please leave a comment ^^

[identity profile] baboboy.livejournal.com 2008-11-08 08:41 pm (UTC)(link)
poor junsu hyesu! D: and I love how Jaejoong is a caring brother :D please update soon! <3

[identity profile] hana-cho.livejournal.com 2008-11-08 08:49 pm (UTC)(link)
thank you ^^

and you can say Junsu, because Jae used it too. Yeah and Jae is such a caring brother. ^^

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[identity profile] ilovetvxq.livejournal.com 2008-11-08 09:04 pm (UTC)(link)
Second? >.>
OMG!!! Poor Su >o<
I love this ^.^
Update soooooon! *get whacked*

<3333

[identity profile] invisiblemask20.livejournal.com 2008-11-08 09:30 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh god, cute Susu >.<. Jae's gonna take Su's place to go to Yunho right?
Update soon please! It's quiet short and i'm so sad that there's no more to read when i finish the chapter

[identity profile] hana-cho.livejournal.com 2008-11-08 09:34 pm (UTC)(link)
sorry that it is too short, but I wanted to post today and through my classes I can't write that much. But the next one should be longer. I hope it.

thank you that you like it.
haru_ran: (sexy-junsu)

[personal profile] haru_ran 2008-11-08 09:53 pm (UTC)(link)
+YAY+ finally the opferungsfic is there +YAY+

*giggles* there you go with our sexy Susu and his "Flaum" *giggles*

love you unnie *huggles and kisses*

[identity profile] moon1084.livejournal.com 2008-11-08 10:07 pm (UTC)(link)
looks really really intersting

[identity profile] lunarrays.livejournal.com 2008-11-08 10:37 pm (UTC)(link)
i like this. please update soon, k
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[identity profile] hana-cho.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 07:07 am (UTC)(link)
sorry I've forgotten to link the characters add the post of chapter 1.
Junsu is called Hyesu because their mother wanted a daughter and so she raised him as a girl.

thank you for reading ^^

[identity profile] mairasm.livejournal.com 2008-11-08 11:14 pm (UTC)(link)
Ahhhhh very interesting!!!
Cant wait for the next part!!!
Jae is going instead of Junsu or is he going to try and get him back?
curious!!!
lol

[identity profile] shimering2.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 12:37 am (UTC)(link)
>.< Poor Junsu! Being forced to be a girl and then later being sacrificed T_T.

Hope it all goes well with whatever Jae comes up with. Can't wait for the next chapter :D.

[identity profile] nadiahrozlee.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 01:52 am (UTC)(link)
oohh can't wait to see what jae's gonna do n yunho's reaction:)

[identity profile] freya-xiah.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 03:14 am (UTC)(link)
interesting...
waiting for the next chapter...^^

[identity profile] juhli.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 04:20 am (UTC)(link)
aaahhhh...so hyesu is junsu xDD needed a while till i realized that xDDD

jae is such a caring brother <3

<33 thanks for updating

[identity profile] hana-cho.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 07:12 am (UTC)(link)
lol but I wrote it in the profiles ^^

thank you ^^

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[identity profile] hana-cho.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 07:45 am (UTC)(link)
thank you ^^

and yeah Junsu is Hyesu. And all people think that Junsu is a girl only the family know it that he is a boy.

[identity profile] jelleus.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 09:19 am (UTC)(link)
i'm curious about it...

who is hyesu anyway?
is hyesu and junsu the same person?

[identity profile] hana-cho.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 10:00 am (UTC)(link)
yeah junsu is hyesu

I've forgot to link the profiles at the post ^^

[identity profile] ppa86.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 12:38 pm (UTC)(link)
ok...next

[identity profile] cherjae.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 01:34 pm (UTC)(link)
poor su!!!

:(
human sacrifices..

D:


<3

[identity profile] jaesa2617.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 04:20 pm (UTC)(link)
awwww poor su!! T.T i cant wait for nxt update!! wanna know how jae is gonna save su. or how the lord will react when he sees tt su is a boy indeed. LOL.

[identity profile] coke-pie221.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 07:30 pm (UTC)(link)
oohh~ this looks really interesting XDD
poor susu...being offered away by his her mom...
i really can't w8 to see what will happen next XD

[identity profile] akameluver716.livejournal.com 2008-11-09 08:35 pm (UTC)(link)
yes! the first chapter! :)

i really like it so far.

[identity profile] anime76.livejournal.com 2008-11-10 02:21 pm (UTC)(link)
Poor Su being chosen because everyone thinks he is a girl. Such a cruel fate. How will the villagers react when Jae takes Su's place? LOL, how will they react when they find out they have cheated the lord!

[identity profile] hana-cho.livejournal.com 2008-11-10 05:56 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm sorry for what I did with Su.
But how will you know that Jae took Su's place?

thanks, dear

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[identity profile] tickled41.livejournal.com 2008-12-03 11:45 am (UTC)(link)
oo I've been meaning to read this for a while now :DD
interesting idea~ was always one for the whole sacrifice finding longer with the seemingly heartless god ( or lord in this case)
Aww poor jun-- err hyesu

[identity profile] reya13.livejournal.com 2009-04-04 05:34 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh no, i love Junsu laughing and smiling brightly. It breaks my heart to see him cry.
His mother is a weirdo. How can she turn him into a girl. He must be so confused and sad because of this T__T

[identity profile] emgai.livejournal.com 2009-04-05 05:37 am (UTC)(link)
heyys.

first time reading ur fic..
bit confused. buh ii get it now.. ^^

umm interesting so far.
ii wonder.. if anii thing suss is gonnah happen soon?

lools.

perverted already. >_<

anii ways.

mind adding me bak :P

xx

[identity profile] cool-mint-ka.livejournal.com 2009-09-29 04:13 pm (UTC)(link)
ah so sad for junsu but i love the brotherly love they have for each other!

[identity profile] noirsama.livejournal.com 2009-10-27 03:07 pm (UTC)(link)
jaejoong, junsu then changminnie, what a beautiful brothers they are! XD

wonder why only junsu who was dressed as a girl, i'd like to see those cute boys in cute hanbok or kimono *pervert*

oh the story is thrilling :)

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